Monday, August 8, 2011

Quick question: does this paragraph make sense? its SHORT!?

I would change the punctuation in the first/second sentence to "In the 18th century, Britain ruled a vast empire, taking advantage of and ruling the richest countries of that time, such as India." The second to last word in the third sentence should be Indian, not India. In the fourth sentence, there's a run on so it should be changed to "and other cultures. For example,". Also, why is the word "tricked" in quotation marks? The last sentence makes sense but I recommend changing it to "They settled and lived this way for years. Who's to say their later generations didn't have the right to live in Britain?

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