Here, another poem I was not going to write for YAP. Will you c/c? Will you advise/edit my poem? Pleae answer?

One of my faults is the full rhyme. With free verse being the main form of poetry today the half rhyme gives a more modern feel. But you retain the meter of traditional forms, which is good to hear. When read out loud this sounds really smooth and there are no tongue twisters - some poets doing free verse READ okay but SOUND dreadful. This is excellent. A love poem that expounds in enough words to get the message across. Like it a lot.